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Good job! No wobble. But you've got work to do. What I would suggest is that you play more with it and flow more with it. You are holding back a lot... I'm not talking about volume, I am talking about freedom. You are being rigid with the melody and rythm. Can you do me a favor? Make a recording of this same part of the song but don't use words... use silly syllables like "doo dah, gah goo gah gah, doo dee daa..." You get the idea. Pretend you're a baby that doesn't know how to speak yet but is singing the melody of the song. Don't worry about how it comes out. Make up your own silly syllables... also... rotate your hips and shoulders lightly as you do this, basically act like and idiot and don't try to sound good. You are trying to sound good on this recording and that is affecting your tone, musicality and emotion. Do this silly exercise and post it. Don't be embarrased, if you are embarrased, that is where the problem is, you are being to shy and you are trying to impress us. No need for that.